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Skill Drill: Tightening the Lead
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     Reporters usually try to make their leads as short as possible. Here are some leads that contain unnecessary attribution, redundancies, opinions of the reporter, excess wordage, unimportant quotes, unnecessarily specific information. Use the subject-verb-object sentence structure for most of the leads.

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A. Pollute

     In looking for pollution along the city's lakeshore, investigators for the state Environmental Protection Commission said today they have discovered what they described as "high levels of beach and waterfront pollution."

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B. Contract

     The city today awarded a contract to Polly Plumbing Inc., of Roanoke, for the construction of 35 "necessary houses," also known as outhouses, along the state's roads and highways. The successful low bid by the firm was $89,565.

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C. Year-End

     The office of the police department today released year-end crime figures for the city that show homicides were down from 139 the previous year to 124 last year, but all other types of violent crime increased, 896 to 1,086.

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D. Women

     In a talk entitled "Whither Women," Hortense Hillerbrandt, an assistant state attorney general, and vice president of the caucus, told some 450 delegates to the annual convention of the Women's Caucus meeting here not to "put aside family responsibilities when you hang up the apron."

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E. Kids

     Benjamin Brown, the well-known child psychologist and author, said today in a speech to state educators that his studies and those of others indicate young children spend more time in front of TV sets than in bed asleep.

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F. Fatal

     Two cars collided at the intersection of Elm and Johnson Streets last night at 10:45 p.m. and took the lives of a local couple, Herbert and Helen Oliver, 56 Fairmont Blvd., and injured the passengers in the second car, Dwight Tanner and Beatrice Honer, both of Topeka.

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G. Retire

     When the church bells strike 12 noon tomorrow, the Rev. Frederick Malabee, who has retired, will walk down the main isle of St. John's for the last time as the church's pastor. He has presided over 542 Sunday services without missing one since he came here more than 10 years ago.

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H. Concert

     The community concert of the Philadelphia Symphony Orchestra, which had been scheduled for tomorrow evening at 8 p.m., has been indefinitely postponed because of the sudden illness of the conductor, Mrs. Ellen Klein, secretary of the concert association, said today.

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I. Aspirin

     Although we do not know much about why it works wonders, the most common household medicine, aspirin, has added stroke prevention to its powers, a report by a team of researchers at the Southwestern Community Hospital reported today. One or two aspirin a day is the recommended dosage.

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J. Tax

     Good news for taxpayers: Rep. Harmon C. Connally, of Texas, told members of the local Lions Club at their luncheon today at the Belmont Motel that big federal spending programs will face tough sledding in Congress next session.








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